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Dira Sudis ([personal profile] dira) wrote2012-01-30 08:25 am

WIP meme!

(Dreamwidth only: Random icon is random and also a reminder from the universe that I need to get started on my Lupercalia story. Speaking of WIPs.)

WIP Meme! Because, let's face it, I am constitutionally incapable of letting this one go by without participating.

From [personal profile] misspamela: Post a random sentence (or three whole paragraphs) from every WIP you're currently working on, even if it's very short. Then invite people to ask questions about your WIP. With any luck, you'll get talking about writing, and the motivation to take that WIP one step closer to completion will appear as if by magic!

Naturally I am going for the "three whole paragraphs" option. Feel free to ask questions! Even if they are more of a comment than a question.


"Her name is Jenny," he said, without looking at Robbie and sounding rather like he was reporting what he'd learned from a witness. "We talked on my birthday, but that's been months now. I haven't seen her in person since Christmas. I don't know if she--"

Finally Hathaway's endurance seemed to snap; he opened the door and got out without another word, leaving Robbie to trail after him, trying furiously to work out what they were hurrying into. Birthday and Christmas sounded like dutiful familial obligation--Jenny could be a sister or a cousin. Hathaway would have been more formal in speaking or referring to anyone of an older generation. But if the relationship were purely dutiful, why had so little rattled Hathaway so badly?

As he pushed through the front door of the café in Hathaway's wake, Robbie was working out the familiar awful scenarios: Jenny was a runaway, plus or minus unsuitable boyfriend. She was probably on drugs, might even have fallen into prostitution, and her unexpected appearance on Hathaway's doorstep might be the last chance anyone had to help her before--



Arkady shut the drawer and sat down beside him on the edge of the bed, frowning a little. "I've never really seen the point. I mean, sex is already fun. It's sex. I don't know what you'd need toys for."

Aral was startled into a laugh and said, "I don't know whether to be flattered or concerned at your lack of forethought."

Arkady gave him an assessing up-and-down look and said confidently, "There are meds for that, and even if they're contraindicated for whatever reason there are fingers and mouths and your voice and everything else. I'd rather have you, not some piece of plastic."



Nate looked exactly like Brad always pictured him: exhausted in the full life-in-a-combat-zone sense of the word, used up and without hope of resupply. He was red-eyed and underweight.

He'd let his hair grow out, though, and he was wearing a Dartmouth t-shirt. His appearance screamed civilian, but despite his departure from the grooming standard he looked basically neat and clean.

He didn't look at all surprised to see Brad. Puzzled, like he didn't know what Brad wanted--which was fair, because Brad didn't either--but not surprised to see him standing there.
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[personal profile] philomytha 2012-01-30 04:02 pm (UTC)(link)
Arkady and Aral! I am very curious to know where that one is going; I'm not sure whether I want Aral to widen Arkady's horizons, or Arkady to remind Aral of simpler pleasures.

Also, I think I might need to steal this meme :-)
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[personal profile] trope 2012-02-01 08:27 am (UTC)(link)
Except for the Barrayaran cultural conditioning of we're-out-to-get-you, Arkady is disturbingly Betan sometimes, isn't he? He's so clinical in the way he thinks about sex. It's like power and control subtexts just slip right by him.

Does Arkady understand Aral's idea of "fun sometimes" to also involve all of Aral's self-destructive tendencies? It rarely shows up in the Miles-centric canon, and I'm sure it's well tamped down by the warm fuzzy blanket of new relationship energy, but I've been standing here looking at my watch, waiting for Aral to freak out. Though possibly running an empire for a couple decades really breaks a person of their masochism.

I'd also be interested in knowing--for Arkady's sake and mine--whether there is any good sex to be had in this story before all the propositions become theoretical.
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[personal profile] trope 2012-02-01 08:42 pm (UTC)(link)
Sorry about that! I don't mean to ask the hard questions (or jump to any conclusions about the characters, since I've decided that I love Arkady and am on his team no matter what). I will stop watching the clock and try to put down my own interpretations of PAIN PAIN PAIN--that's probably being mapped onto this story snippet because of some other things I'm writing, and my rather dim view of relationships at the moment.

Of course I would like to hear the long answer! That's what us fans show up for. But I don't want to obligate you, or do anything to impede your natural progress on any of these three stories.

(breathes a sigh of relief for Aral and Arkady, and their future together...)
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[personal profile] trope 2012-02-03 05:57 am (UTC)(link)
Waitaminnit, I don't want to be the cause of painful incidents! No more plotting for you! In fact, let's not talk about Vorkosigans at all. Look over there: is that a wolf?

You've got a brilliant point: I forgot all about Cordelia. Also, I don't think Cordelia would have turned him loose on a romantically-inexperienced twenty-five-year-old under his military authority... One of the things that I think is really challenging to me at the moment is how to write these groups of characters in long-term relationships (familial or romantic or otherwise) because I tend to think of all of them as separate moving parts. When I can stop and see them overlap with each other, it's all much easier. You have a way with characters' mindsets.

Thanks!
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[personal profile] gurrier 2012-01-30 04:31 pm (UTC)(link)
I'd love to know more about the Lewis kidfic The more I look at those three paragraphs, the more questions I have! So, a list for readability:
  • Was Hathaway's daughter conceived or born while he was working with Lewis?
  • Does she live in Oxford, or is distance a factor?
  • Who is her mother, and what is her current relationship with Hathaway like?
  • After finding out about her, is there anything Lewis looks back at and rethinks?
  • Is it before or after Lewis's grandchild is born?
  • Is this gen, an established relationship or a new relationship?


I'll stop before I think of anything else :) Feel free to ignore any and all of those!
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[personal profile] reginagiraffe 2012-01-30 04:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Oooo, now I want to hear about the time Arkady got off on just Aral's voice!
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[personal profile] spatz 2012-01-31 04:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Nate looked exactly like Brad always pictured him: exhausted in the full life-in-a-combat-zone sense of the word, used up and without hope of resupply. He was red-eyed and underweight.

*winces* Ouch, what's wrong with Nate?
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[personal profile] spatz 2012-02-01 05:18 am (UTC)(link)
FICK OFFSPRING OMG.